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    dots Submission Name: Flat Imagedots
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    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    3.04 - 52/70/56
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsFlat Imagedots
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    Deep as darkness
    I dilate to gather your soul
    I taste your thoughts
    And swallow them whole
    I heat your skin and it melts in my hands
    My breath cools you like a Japanese fan
    Head on the door
    knee's on the floor
    I digress
    Your picture is cold
    And probably old
    I'll open again someday





    Submitted on 2007-11-05 10:59:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked it. I actually enjoyed your rhyming scheme.
    | Posted on 2007-11-05 00:00:00 | by IEggman7 | [ Reply to This ]


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