its very phillosphoical.
i just dont see how that would go to music. may be you would do better if you made the flow and meter a little better and made it into a poem.
just a thought. it is a very good question. it makes some one think about what was just said. i like that in a poem / music.
i also like the parallelism that you put into it. it makes it have a sort of ring to it !