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    Author: atonement
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 105/180/95
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 99
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    Bytes: 418



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       I just don't know anymore


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    In a fit of insainity
    Porceline fist shatter without a sound,
    pleas of truth and violence
    clutter on the ground.
    When screams are never acknowledged,
    scilence is worshiped,
    I am Humpty Dumpty,
    and this world is coming down.
    I just can't stand this,
    making things out of nothing,
    I just don't understand it,
    and down I go once more.




    Submitted on 2007-11-05 19:16:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I am Humpty Dumpty,
    and this world is coming down."

    This verse is pure geniuss. It made me laugh. As for the poem, it's ok but it could use some fine tuning. Anyway, keep writing!
    | Posted on 2007-11-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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