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    dots Submission Name: No one to blamedots
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    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 903
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    Bytes: 1464



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    dotsNo one to blamedots
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    The rim of the glass, circular and never ending
    with a shallow depth of liquid below it, gleaming with tempting end
    No matter how much it hurts to think about
    I've done everything to myself, and yet
    anything i do won't make it better
    Why break it if it's not fixed? yeah...

    Time to lose again...that tempting end at the bottom of the glass...looks darker yet...and even better.

    Sworn to a code...that never meant shit
    swore to an ode...thats killed my friends
    take a long look in the road...YOU KNOW WHERE IT WAS SUPPOSED TO FUCKING END
    and here i sit profusely swearing and helpless
    and not able to do a fucking thing to persuade anyones views and beliefs or anyones aid
    so I'm broken, like everyone else and tired
    of the shit everything throws back
    God I just want to attack...I just want to lash
    and destroy everything around me, and leave me to my own demise...it's happening anyway
    i've already dove into shit I never thought
    I never thought i'd dive into

    The rim of the glass, circular and never ending
    much like the feelings in my head have been
    for years...
    and yet that dark liquid at the bottom, has entranced my glances so...

    but I have no fingers to point...
    cause there is no one to blame...







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