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    dots Submission Name: A Wandered Wonderdots
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    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.51 - 904/475/311
    Words: 875
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsA Wandered Wonderdots
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    There is a wandering,wondering, wandering
    about
    what is the purpose burning itself into the
    dancing,
    rolling, tumbling, frolicked, marvellously formed
    little wonder
    patiently waiting mentally formed parasite
    shaking
    sheet of its waterbedded ingrediently formed
    soup
    as if Heaven's granduered plan awaited
    ejection time
    to jettison this Wonder of the World formed
    to it's planned
    logical positivismed encapsuled logos.

    Once the trigger is pulled and ejection
    rumbles complete
    no force internal nor external can change
    formula
    of these chemicals' eternally bonded
    copyright;
    thus, these screams of river flooded has
    no futility
    as to the reason of why this creation,
    though abused,
    though with held fromits purpose, ere shall
    remain true to cause
    of its Heavenly adopted volitioned bell
    ringing
    that vibrates the very depths of why this
    created was formed.




    Submitted on 2007-11-06 00:42:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece is too wordy. I there is too much going on. The first line destracts me from the whole poem. "There is a wandering, wondering, wandering about." It to busy. I am still trying to figure out what this line is saying, nevermind what it may mean or why it may be there. The whole poem is just a list of adjectives and such.
    | Posted on 2007-11-06 00:00:00 | by IEggman7 | [ Reply to This ]


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