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    dots Submission Name: Along an endless roaddots
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    Author: vohomegirl
    ASL Info:    28 and at the gate...
    Elite Ratio:    6.83 - 314/191/78
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsAlong an endless roaddots
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    I walk along an endless road
    breathing it's dust and twisting with each turn
    the hedges unravel and pursuade, entice and
    grope my heels with their savoury tendrels
    and stroke my ears with whispers --

    Never return to the city, the lights
    the ones who taunt and mock
    and smile with wild eyes

    The night is hallowed
    and cold

    the crows become one with the night.




    Submitted on 2007-11-06 06:23:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have somehow conjured a sad and powerful piece of poetry here in but a few words, though I would be hard pressed to explain exactly how you did this. Really quite an excellent piece of poetry, and I loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo... michael (note: "city of lights"? Paris?)
    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      you 've breathed new life into known constructions. and tgheer's no definite end so that you could re-read again and again, endless.

    overall, this is a nice poetic exercise but somehow i feel that it lacks somethings crucial. can't figure out what.
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by expiring_touch | [ Reply to This ]
      That was beautiful. The only thing I wished for was for some puntuation just to make the poem feel finished. Other than that I enjoyed it very much.
    | Posted on 2007-11-06 00:00:00 | by IEggman7 | [ Reply to This ]



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