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    dots Submission Name: glass paperdots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1347
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 406



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       i dont know what i was thinking i dont think im done but i shall update if i can rearange it to fit how i want


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    dotsglass paperdots
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    life is but a dream,
    a lonly dream at that!

    Lost among the swan willows,
    deep within a nap!

    i know little of this,
    and even less of that!

    but,
    when i dream my lonly dream,
    i get lost from where im at!

    this is no a plee,
    but a beg from such as me!

    do not, do not,
    wake me up!




    Submitted on 2007-11-06 14:32:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aww... adorable. i believe i did understand it...

    ~*Jackz*!~
    | Posted on 2007-11-07 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      I really Really like this
    I often wonder if the dream world is the real world and our waking hours are but a dream
    I for one always seem to find my deepest relaxation state while I am sleeping and very rarely do I have nightmeares
    Again Excellent work!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please ifd you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-11-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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