Facing the Truth of a Lesser Me by Peggy Paris

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Submission Name: Facing the Truth of a Lesser Me dots

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Author:	Peggy Paris
ASL Info:	60/F/USA
Elite Ratio:	4.12 - 723/561/167
Words:	98

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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Facing the Truth of a Lesser Me dots

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If truth be known by honesty,
The world might see a lesser me
For candor comes not sweetly slanted;
Facts learned, I do not take for granted.

What belongs to the World looks much smaller in worth
Than the people and gifts deemed a right of my birth.

This guilt still sets my heart aflame
When others try to point and blame.
I see myself as kind and gentle;
In truth, I'm only sentimental.

What the looking glass spots, my own pride may reject;
And the World surely knows my own guilt is neglect.

Submitted on 2007-11-06 18:56:32 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a humbling piece and I, too, feel you were hard on yourself - you are a joy & a wonder!

We aren't perfect and we not strive to be perfect but we are creators and stewards for love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
tif ~*~
| Posted on 2008-10-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow Sharon, you were rather harsh in taking yourself to task in this piece. Lord knows we all have brightness and creeping shadows as equal parts of our personalities.
| Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
  Great poem!!!

A unique sort of poem with good meter and a lot of meaning!

These are well expressed and mature thoughts!

Quite inspiring ......

Good Write! : )
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| Posted on 2007-11-17 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
  This was lovely and reinforced with humility! It's funny though; we all often view ourselves more critically and harshly that others see us! The truth of the matter is, you really are a bright flower in life's boquet, Sharon, and you shed kindness, illumination, and verse that brightens the lives and provides inspiration for many of us out here in the large world! Bravo, and "keep on keeping on"!!
| Posted on 2007-11-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  I enjoyed this these words you used mushed together so perfectly. They flowed with one another as if it were ment to be. But they all still had their own meaning. Amazing write. :) Maybe... you could think of Adding I was sad to see it end so soon. Just a thought.

~!*Jackz*!~
| Posted on 2007-11-07 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  Sharon
Hi this is Karen Rons mom
I just want to say I was very impressed with this write
This write reflects my own life perfectly
You surely do have a knack with words
I asked Ron to make this a favorite and Im sure he will
Your words are always so true in your writes
I enjoy your writing
Please keep in touch
Karen
| Posted on 2007-11-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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