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    dots Submission Name: xo marks the spotdots
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    Author: caster
    ASL Info:    23.m.oh
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 126/215/118
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 117
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1042



    Description:
       about: a girl and cutting/suicide. 'xo' is in reference to a tattoo i have on my left wrist, which is a sketchy heart with 'xo' written in the center in sketchy lettering. hopefully 'sketchy' makes sense to you.

    feedback: all feedback is welcome.


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    dotsxo marks the spotdots
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    you’re like a shotgun wedding
    making it quick and making me dead
    such a familiar setting
    you’re borrowed and im so blue

    you’re like a suicide notwithstanding
    there’s no last rites for the living dead
    such a familiar setting
    razor blades are so becoming of you

    if tomorrow is just a suggestion
    may i suggest then
    you get busy dying or get busy trying
    cause this world wont have you
    and i cant afford to anymore

    you’re like a car crash symphony
    a disaster set to a popular soundtrack
    such a familiar setting
    im already forgetting to forget you

    if tomorrow is just a suggestion
    may i suggest then
    you get busy dying or get busy trying
    cause this world wont have you
    and i cant afford to anymore

    get busy dying or get busy trying
    get busy dying or get busy trying
    get busy dying or get busy trying
    get busy dying or get busy trying




    Submitted on 2007-11-07 00:12:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "you’re like a suicide notwithstanding
    there’s no last rites for the living dead
    such a familiar setting
    razor blades are so becoming of you"

    Beautiful. Reminds me of so many breakups.
    Apparently, cutters and/or "emotionally dead" people can't keep a relationship down.

    The Peice glitters with talent. I liked the repition of the last lines, it provokes a powerful ultimatum.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-03-19 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      Someone told me to read this, and I'm really glad I did.
    The wording and everything is just... perfect.

    "cause this world wont have you
    and i cant afford to anymore"

    I've been thinking the same thing.

    "you’re like a car crash symphony
    a disaster set to a popular soundtrack
    such a familiar setting
    im already forgetting to forget you"

    That might be my favorite part, but it's hard to pick just one.
    You have a lot of talent, and it shows through every word.

    I cannot critique this.
    I love it.

    Ohh, the title works wonderfully too.

    Beautifully done.
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]



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