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    dots Submission Name: Reddots
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    Author: IEggman7
    ASL Info:    20/F/Ma
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 12/16/14
    Words: 404
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 824
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 864



    Description:
       The poem isn't in the shape I had it before, because I guess editing it fucks it up like that.


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    dotsReddots
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    Red
    Smoothly flows
    past my eyes.Open and reveal
    the world. Four little birds popping perkishly
    together, fly off and scatter their joy upon the city.
    Ignorant souls lined up within my view. Stepping on the neutral
    ground , discarding the dark black cracks crossing their path.
    The chilling air moves gently past my face, leaving
    a harsh reminder along my flesh.
    Familiarity grows closer to my refreshing heat,
    then wanders off.
    I take a deep breath.
    Red




    Submitted on 2007-11-07 08:10:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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