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    Author: jasonsanctuary
    ASL Info:    17/M/OK
    Elite Ratio:    3.97 - 27/28/13
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 773
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       I want to escape myself...


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    Flying High I can see my life
    Everything scattered in a morose revalation
    I can see that smile
    Rise up to meet my potential
    Fly with Butterfly wings,
    catch me if you can
    My beauty surpasses all
    Still I can't be a man
    How can I escape the fall?
    It's inevitable, covet me all you want
    I hate my flaunt
    Fit my ego through a needle eye
    Impossible
    Hear my sigh
    I break from my shell
    and stretch my wings
    Now I'll head south
    for the ever cold deception
    Find me if you will, love.




    Submitted on 2007-11-07 10:30:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh i l.ove this poem. sorry i didnt come i am sick. i think you wrote this very well love. lol. keep it up and you will get better than me!
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]


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