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    dots Submission Name: Disappointeddots
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    Author: kession
    ASL Info:    18~M~ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115/156/63
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 857
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    Bytes: 1227



    Description:
       about an issue i am having with my girlfriend


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    dotsDisappointeddots
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    I love you so much,
    I don't want to see you get hurt,
    Thats why I get mad,
    Thats why I speak my mind.

    You see to make bad choices,
    With every corner you turn,
    I don't see why you can't quit,
    And just leave it all behind.

    You know it could hurt you,
    But you just brush it off,
    You act like it doesn't matter,
    Like nothing will happen to you.

    You act like you don't care,
    But I would die if you were lost,
    I want you to quit while you're with me,
    And that's the Gods honest truth.

    You went behind my back,
    And tried to do it secretly,
    Keeping it from me,
    Because you knew it would make me mad.

    You betrayed my trust,
    You hid it from me,
    That's what hurt most,
    That's what was bad.

    It makes me wonder,
    What else you're hiding,
    Or what you might hide,
    Later on down the line.

    This will bring some trust issues,
    It will take time to work through,
    But I'll do my best,
    I'll work on it, I'll try.




    Submitted on 2007-11-07 17:32:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. it flowed very nicely, the only thing, there isn't any background. You make it very mysterious and the reader has to figure out what it is that makes you mad, other than keeping the truth from you. Other than that it was awesome. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

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    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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