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    dots Submission Name: Below the ground.dots

    Author: Katherine_Music
    ASL Info:    21/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 17/18/11
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I forced this out of me so I am sorry if it is horrible.
    I hate having writers block.

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    dotsBelow the ground.dots

    Loneliness has nothing on me now
    Alone with no one to care about me.
    Left to find my own way
    Through my emotional pain
    With no way to see.

    No real reason to feel the way I do.
    Only a thought in my head
    That holds me far below the ground.
    Below hell and multen rock
    Between sanity and hallucinations.

    How can I face the world
    When the world holds me under?
    I scream for air but I'm suffocating
    There's no air for me to breathe
    Only pain and more suffering.

    Submitted on 2007-11-07 20:21:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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