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    dots Submission Name: Why wont he forget medots
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    Author: TheBlackFairy
    ASL Info:    18/female/Caldwell
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 32/29/15
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWhy wont he forget medots
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    Like a shadow he sweeps in from above,
    Blocking the light from my mind,
    He attempts to smother me with memories,
    Trying to drown me in love.

    Why can’t he just let me be?
    The pain he causes is plain to see,
    The devastation he unleashes upon my life
    Is bordered with the best of intentions
    But leaves only strife.

    His words are honey laced with cyanide,
    He poisons the air as I run and hide,
    Left with nothing more then a broken heart,
    Why can’t he just let me make a new start?

    Instead he makes the phone start to ring,
    Ignoring the tears that each call brings,
    If I pick it up I will surely fall,
    Why is there nothing I can say that will end it all?

    So like a flame I try to fight the dark,
    With sword and chain I protect my heart,
    Dodging the ringing that seems to never end,
    Hiding deep inside where I can pretend
    That maybe, just maybe, he’ll leave me alone.




    Submitted on 2007-11-07 20:44:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Just work on the flow.

    and try to see things from his veiw...Get past yourself, and see that he loves you. The best thing to do if you don't love him (which it seems like you do) is cut off all contact with him and let him go.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-01-02 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm not even going to think about anything but how amazing the sentiment. i read it and i all i could think was, my ex needs to read this. "His words are honey laced with cyanide," i relate. i sympathize and kudos .
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enojyed reading this but I agree that the rhyme and such were inconsistant which took away from some of the poem. I think it distracted me a bit, but other then that nice work.
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. I like it alot. The flow was a little inconsistant and the rhyme was a bit off, but other than that it was very good. I can relate my ex was like that for awhile and now he just really doesn't bother me. He'll learn to leave you alone, but like everything else, it takes time. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    »MIss MIsery«
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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