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    dots Submission Name: The Intricacies of a Daydreamdots
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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Intricacies of a Daydreamdots
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    My reality tends to
                        burst at the seams
    erupting into arbitrary daydreams
    that reel me in
    and I protest
    but soon I am suspended effortlessly
                        in space
    Reality becomes imaginary
    and daydreams become my day
    Muscles go limp
    and Oh! how I lose myself--
                        --to glittering forests
                        --to a contrived romance
                        --to the intricacies of a true escape
    I shift between
                        altered states of reality
    cotton-candy clouds
                        a bath of tiger lilies
    swimming great distances
                        across cerulean seas
    as the sky rains poetry
    and I open my mouth wide
    and let it fall in
                        --finding myself to be enjoying
    the gloriousness of drowning
    in limericks and haiku
    and lost loves and personal whims
    and connotations and epitaphs
    and oceans and suns and clouds and...



                        someone has just tapped me on the shoulder.




    Submitted on 2007-11-07 23:36:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh my god!

    This is so, so beautiful. Really, I absolutely love your imagery.

    If someone were to make this an art piece (you know, draw it or paint it or something), it would also make a killer art piece.

    I just love this, I really do. Your work is amazing me over and over.

    -Ethan

    P.S. Thank you for making my day.
    | Posted on 2007-12-09 00:00:00 | by Inkybro | [ Reply to This ]
      This was an awsome read. It describes exactly how I feel when daydreaming. Maybe not the same day dreams as you, but hey.
    I think you did an awsome job. I would have to say that my favorite part was the last line. Because it is so true.
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by Elissar | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow,

    This is wonderful. This poem was so much fun to read. This piece was so musical and inviting.
    I was right there dreaming with you. I really can't suggest changing a thing about this piece.
    I would only suggest making a part 2, but then again many sequels don't do justice to the originals. Anyway, Great Work!
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]


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