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    dots Submission Name: What to wear?dots
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    Author: Derrick Thomas
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 21/59/39
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Misc/Legend
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    dotsWhat to wear?dots
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    I am still aware of myself and of underneath myself and of the space between the thin layers.

    They make my eyes crack.

    I love you.

    Raspberry sparks, an ancient tortoise rises up into the sky.

    All the people shout now, shout now.

    Shout about the day you(I) died.

    Lick me.




    Submitted on 2007-11-08 06:42:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really good.
    | Posted on 2009-03-12 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it.

    I don't presume to have any idea that I know what it means or that I have an insight to what you're thinking now that I've read this.

    Cause I'm clueless.

    But it feels right to me.

    And I don't even have all the enlightenment of a giant snake...so...
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      okay so when i read this i think of what id think of if i was dead and 6 feet under. realising that thinking isnt something a dead person should be able to do but can you imagine just... not being able to think?

    your pieces always mess with my head because they seem so abstract and therefore can be interpreted in many different ways.

    the lick me at the end confuses me.
    unless you use 'lick' in a sense of beat me/i lose but i dont know if your country uses lick to mean that.

    i dont know.
    i never do.
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Raspberry sparks, an ancient tortoise rises up into the sky
    an interesting line but somehow i haven,t got a clue about what you are trying to bring across in your poem.the writer knows what he is saying,but the reader(myself) is left......
    take care
    tschüß
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]
      I would really love for you to explain this to me.
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe you are referring to how even in death the energy carrying the Human in his or her life on the Earth still lives on
    It is true that energy can latch on to any other living thing in effect creating what others may call reincarnation
    I thought you did a Good job describing this
    Excellent Work!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      What? I don't get it.

    No description, and I can't make heads or tails of what's going on here. If you want someone to appreciate it, or comment on it, I would make it understandable.

    peace-krys
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by ruinedsnapshots | [ Reply to This ]


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