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    dots Submission Name: No Neverdots
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    Author: Keiran
    ASL Info:    20/M/NZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 40/47/33
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 825
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1882



    Description:
       I feel like I'm skirting around the issue with this piece, which I don't really like. But I'm not quite sure how to hit it on the head.

    But anyway,

    Enjoy


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    dotsNo Neverdots
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    This is called a coldcut
    It's where I do something
    To grab your attention
    So you'll be intrigued enough
    To follow the rabbit hole
    To it's [dead] end

    Let's break a mold tonight
    We'll make it up as we go
    And stuff the consequences in the bag
    Along with all your misgivings and arguments

    Mediocrity
    My worst enemy
    My worst nightmare

    NEVER!

    EVER!

    EVER!

    Say never

    And if you do
    I'll take hold of you
    With all the love I feel
    And we'll jump off a cliff

    Now while the wind whistles through your hair
    And your hearts in your throat
    You're thinking this is where the human body meets the jagged rock
    And you're thinking that this what it is to be alive

    Really
    Really
    Alive

    Now that you're ready
    To live
    To dream
    To live and die for your dream

    Let's change the world
    You and me
    Because I just can't take it anymore
    This idiotic cycle of letdowns
    And comprimise

    They've been telling me that's just the way it is
    For sixteen years now

    I asked why
    Because

    Why must I do it this way
    Because

    Why must I dream that dream
    Because

    Why must I think that thought
    Because

    Why
    Why
    Why
    Because
    Because
    Because

    Because I'll tell you what
    I'm gonna find out why
    And if there really is no answer
    Then I'll come up with one of my own

    No fear
    No doubt
    No never




    Submitted on 2007-11-08 16:50:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh, you truly hit this one on the head. No, you didn't skirt around the issue. You attacked the issue and mocked it until it asphyxiated. Why do I think this?

    Because.
    Because.
    Because.

    "And if you do
    I'll take hold of you
    With all the love I feel
    And we'll jump off a cliff" --> Yay! Jagged rocks are my friend!

    Jumping off a cliff sounds both terrifying and hilarious. Sometimes I think I've already fallen.

    "Now while the wind whistles through your hair
    And your hearts in your throat
    You're thinking this is where the human body meets the jagged rock
    And you're thinking that this what it is to be alive" --> That would probably be me when I looked at the ground coming towards me. Well, in fact it would be me going towards the ground. I call it a group effort.

    This was a wonderful piece. I wouldn't change anything in it. It is good the way it is.

    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]


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