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    dots Submission Name: Revlon the Mascara dots
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    Author: Suven7
    ASL Info:    18 female Fla
    Elite Ratio:    7.1 - 477/259/47
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 88
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 545



    Description:
       Inspired by cosmetics.


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    dotsRevlon the Mascara dots
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    Their eyes were hidden

    Behind unflattering clumps
    Of Revlon Luxurious Length
    Mascara

    Behind unnaturally tinted
    Contact lenses

    With every blink, tiny clumps
    Shook loose from
    Each exaggerated lash,
    Falling snuggly into the
    Whites of their eyes

    And their eyes turned
    Red
    - No more fake baby blue
    Sunshiny days
    - Just red spider webs
    etched on the fabrics
    of their skies.






    Submitted on 2007-11-08 17:04:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this a lot! Loved the lines " Just red spider webs etched on the fabrics
    of their skies."
    Very well writen and I could see it all in my clear windows (smile)
    Thanks for sharring.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-17 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      yah, I don't know either.
    well, ate..You're trying too hard to be unique.
    lol
    | Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by Fearless | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! That's where vanity takes you. Red, itchy eyes.

    Nice, original idea. Cosmetics. Can't say I've ever seen a poem about cosmetics before. I've seen one on fashion, but not cosmetics.

    "And their eyes turned
    Red
    - No more fake baby blue
    Sunshiny days
    - Just red spider webs
    etched on the fabrics
    of their skies." --> This last stanza is my favourite. I can just see the bloodshot eyes, the red webs on their skies that are their eyes.

    BLOODSHOT EYES ARE FIERCENESS!

    .....
    Sorry about that...I get excited sometimes.

    Anyways, many points for good humour, imagery, and an original idea. Kudos.

    Keep up the good writing!
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]



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