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Dulce Dulce Dulce


Author: Suven7
ASL Info:    20 female Fla
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Words: 167
Class/Type: Story /Serious
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Not many people will understand this piece because not many have a relative, a daughter, a sister who is autistic.

And even then, not many people have Emily for a sister.


Dulce Dulce Dulce



My sister is 13 and
She has one friend
::Dulce::
My mother invited Dulce
To Emily's birthday party.

Dulce's mother said yes
And Emily was happy
-an amazing grin on her face
-bouncing up and down
the couch in her blue dress.

Two hours into the party
And the one friend
Still hadn't arrived

The one friend's mother called
And Emily was happy
To hear Dulce's name
In the conversation.

My mother stopped her
Fussing in the kitchen,
Set down the phone,
Told her Dulce was not coming.

Yes, yes Dulce come
::nod::nod::
No, no Dulce can't come
Yes...y..yes
No.

And then a sudden gasp
For air, a wail of
disappointment

[I wanted to reach into
the ear piece of the phone,
Grab the woman and
squeeeeeeeezzz].

And the couch sat still;
The blue dress deflated
and floated back to earth.

She was 14 when she
finally landed.




Submitted on 2007-11-08 17:20:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow. I loved this piece. And you are right, I cannot relate. I can imagine that sad look on her face though, and just seeing the disappointment in her eyes, oh it would be heartbreaking. I didn't really understand what you meant what you said She was 14 when she
finally landed. If you could explain, that would be awesome. Great read/write!

Duv
| Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
  Okay, so when I read this poem at first I couldn't even comment on it because it was so sad I couldn't stand it.

But now it's like a week later and I just wanted to say something about it. Even if that something is "Sheesh I really like it!"

I can just imagine Emily nodding, and being so excited about Dulce.

:-[

<3 Lucy
| Posted on 2007-11-14 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
  dude, this almost brought tears to my beautiful luscious, chocolate colored eyes.

NO joke.

The effect of emily being 13 and landing as 14 was pretty powerful. The emotions was definitely felt like a wave of heat.

it made me think back again and you definitely captured all the emotions. the sadness and disappointment all at once. Especially to emily that has no friend but one.
Dulce Dulce Dulce....what am I going to do with you??

The back and forth conversation that mama and emily had wen she didn't want to believe that Dulce was coming...definitely made this poem even more heartfelt.

"And the couch sat still;
The blue dress deflated
and floated back to earth."

Very good....very very good.
LOVE IT!!!

--Fearless
| Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by Fearless | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW
I commend you for allthe Love you have for your sister
I have a little sister who has Downs Syndrome and I know of the nsadness that your sister felt as I have seen it in my own little sisters eyes many times
November 13th is her Birthday and I Pray that it will turn out to be her best yet
She deserves it
Excellent Job!!!
I will be Praying for you and your sister
God Bless
Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
My Write FOR MY LITTLE SISTERS BITHDAY I think you might enjoy
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2007-11-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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