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    dots Submission Name: Dulce Dulce Dulcedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Suven7
    ASL Info:    18 female Fla
    Elite Ratio:    7.1 - 477/259/47
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
    Total Views: 111
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1180



    Description:
       Not many people will understand this piece because not many have a relative, a daughter, a sister who is autistic.

    And even then, not many people have Emily for a sister.


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    dotsDulce Dulce Dulcedots
    -------------------------------------------


    My sister is 13 and
    She has one friend
    ::Dulce::
    My mother invited Dulce
    To Emily's birthday party.

    Dulce's mother said yes
    And Emily was happy
    -an amazing grin on her face
    -bouncing up and down
    the couch in her blue dress.

    Two hours into the party
    And the one friend
    Still hadn't arrived

    The one friend's mother called
    And Emily was happy
    To hear Dulce's name
    In the conversation.

    My mother stopped her
    Fussing in the kitchen,
    Set down the phone,
    Told her Dulce was not coming.

    Yes, yes Dulce come
    ::nod::nod::
    No, no Dulce can't come
    Yes...y..yes
    No.

    And then a sudden gasp
    For air, a wail of
    disappointment

    [I wanted to reach into
    the ear piece of the phone,
    Grab the woman and
    squeeeeeeeezzz].

    And the couch sat still;
    The blue dress deflated
    and floated back to earth.

    She was 14 when she
    finally landed.




    Submitted on 2007-11-08 17:20:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow. I loved this piece. And you are right, I cannot relate. I can imagine that sad look on her face though, and just seeing the disappointment in her eyes, oh it would be heartbreaking. I didn't really understand what you meant what you said She was 14 when she
    finally landed. If you could explain, that would be awesome. Great read/write!

    Duv
    | Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, so when I read this poem at first I couldn't even comment on it because it was so sad I couldn't stand it.

    But now it's like a week later and I just wanted to say something about it. Even if that something is "Sheesh I really like it!"

    I can just imagine Emily nodding, and being so excited about Dulce.

    :-[

    <3 Lucy
    | Posted on 2007-11-14 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
      dude, this almost brought tears to my beautiful luscious, chocolate colored eyes.

    NO joke.

    The effect of emily being 13 and landing as 14 was pretty powerful. The emotions was definitely felt like a wave of heat.

    it made me think back again and you definitely captured all the emotions. the sadness and disappointment all at once. Especially to emily that has no friend but one.
    Dulce Dulce Dulce....what am I going to do with you??

    The back and forth conversation that mama and emily had wen she didn't want to believe that Dulce was coming...definitely made this poem even more heartfelt.

    "And the couch sat still;
    The blue dress deflated
    and floated back to earth."

    Very good....very very good.
    LOVE IT!!!

    --Fearless
    | Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by Fearless | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW
    I commend you for allthe Love you have for your sister
    I have a little sister who has Downs Syndrome and I know of the nsadness that your sister felt as I have seen it in my own little sisters eyes many times
    November 13th is her Birthday and I Pray that it will turn out to be her best yet
    She deserves it
    Excellent Job!!!
    I will be Praying for you and your sister
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    My Write FOR MY LITTLE SISTERS BITHDAY I think you might enjoy
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-11-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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