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    dots Submission Name: My Greatest Defensedots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMy Greatest Defensedots
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    Saw it coming
    and did not flinch.
    Waited out the waiting,
    patience still obtaining,
    it hits me and all I do is wince.

    There's a boy on the beach
    and a boy about to breach
    my sanity but all I want
    is what I cannot reach.

    Closed my eyes
    could not wish it away.
    All of what what has passed hence,
    cursing my greatest defense,
    still nothing to say.
    Oh, my God.
    Still nothing to say.

    There's smoke to this flame,
    smoke in my eyes, tears of shame,
    but who can know,
    if I am the only one to blame.

    Felt so sore
    with dark becoming day.
    Fatigue wins the fight.
    Shadowed pale light.
    What will go, what will stay?
    Oh, my God.
    Still nothing to say.




    Submitted on 2007-11-08 23:44:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i thought that it was very good. it made me feel sad, but it was good. the rhyming was excellent, i thought. it was very fluid and read nicely. i really wouldn't change anything in this. the rhyming was good. the flow was good. the emotions and everything else in it was good.
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]


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