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    dots Submission Name: Dear Lovedots
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    Author: CaughtRedhanded
    ASL Info:    18/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 94/41/22
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 984
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsDear Lovedots
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    The sound of your voice
    The feel of your hand on my cheek
    The thought we will be together…
    forever
    The deep sensation we will last…
    forever

    Today I wish for yesterday…


    I hardly ever hear your voice
    I never feel your touch
    My thoughts wonder into horrid bliss
    We are now a never lasting thing

    I remember the nights
    Our nights we called them
    So full of love a passion…

    I miss the love I felt between us
    Why my Dear Love,
    You broke my heart
    You make me hurt

    I hate myself for losing you
    The pain so deep down
    I cant take it
    And I bet your with her now

    she’s who you share:
    the sound of each others voice
    the touch of each others cheeks
    the thoughts of your togetherness
    the deep sensations you feel for one another

    My heart will always be heavy,
    Because you just up and walked away




    Submitted on 2007-11-09 09:18:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can really relate to this, and it is amazing caz there are not many poems that I can say that about...

    Great write...

    Loved it babe!

    <3

    Liz
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by Liz_Renee | [ Reply to This ]


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