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    dots Submission Name: It Only Takes Twodots

    Author: CaughtRedhanded
    ASL Info:    18/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 94/41/22
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 698
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       I wrote this afew weeks agoa and am just putting it up... I had to tweak it alittle bit.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsIt Only Takes Twodots

    When I woke I missed the words I said everyday.
    The sunlight reaching through the blinds of your window.
    Devistation caught me in the air.
    Seven plus Five
    Will lead me to you.
    Please hold on to my heart for my return.
    Never forget.
    Stay strong, keep whispers out
    & relax.
    Beauty drips down my window pane as I write this.
    Only I feel I canít see beauty without you.
    The miles wonít tear me apart.
    Because I adore you.
    Your words bring me to a sense of a genuine stone.
    Trying to become something.
    You will make me the person I want to be in 100 years.
    I will help make you into who you want to be.
    Silver and Gold is not what matters.
    Laughs, Kisses, and the conversation of two is it.
    Iíll tell you Iím not perfect.
    My words donít come out right.
    But I promise.
    My best.
    I will do anything.
    I will do everything.
    Promise me.
    Youíll catch me when I fall.
    Dream with me.
    Believe in me.
    Love me.

    Submitted on 2007-11-09 09:27:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       I hate to sound clichť, but I can really relate to your poem. I think you're writing about an ex, and the person that I can relate this to, I never even dated, just never had the courage to stand up and tell them how I felt.
    This was beautifully written and the imagery was very powerful. A job well done.

    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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