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    dots Submission Name: This Explains it Alldots
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    Author: CaughtRedhanded
    ASL Info:    18/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 94/41/22
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsThis Explains it Alldots
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    There’s a place in your heart where nobody’s been.
    Take me there.
    Things nobody knows, not even your friends.
    Take me there.
    Tell me about your momma, your daddy, your home town, show me around.
    I wanna see it all, don’t leave anything out.
    I wanna know, everything about you.
    And I wanna go, down every road you’ve been.
    Where your hopes and dreams and wishes live, where you keep the rest of your life hid.
    I wanna know the Boy behind that pretty stare.
    Take me there.
    Your first real kiss, your first ture love.
    You learned about life, spent your summer nights, without a care.
    Take me there.
    I wanna roll down mainstreet and backroads like you did when you were a kid.
    What makes you who you are, tell me what your story is.
    I wanna know, everything about you.
    And I wanna go, down every road you’ve been.
    Where your hopes and dreams and wishes live, where you keep the rest of your life hid.
    I wanna know the Boy behind that pretty stare.
    Take me there.
    I wanna roll down mainstreet.
    I wanna know your hopes and your dreams.
    Take me, take me there.




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      Im not goiing to blow smoke, I like some of your other stuff but this one kind of rambles,it's definately full of passion but very repetitive, almost every line starts with I, anyway still think you rock
    peace is cool,
    Diablo Tapitio.
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this a lot. I think the flow is beautiful.

    It's very well written.
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by BestxDeceptions | [ Reply to This ]
      It was very fluent, and well thought out
    This would make for a nice song. Micky
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by mekisha4ever | [ Reply to This ]


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