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Author: Lover girl
ASL Info:    17, female
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Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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these are feelings and thoughts that have piled in my head for so long that i had to get them all out. this is a text weave poem so they are not all my words, but the feelings are all the same.


My eyes have seen the glory
But my heart has felt the pain
Life is but an empty dream
Where no hope can remain

Not a day passes
Nor a night can slip by
Without bringing me memories
Of your bright shining eyes

It was thy love proved false and frail
It was thy untrue being
I see thine image through my tears tonight
And yet today I saw thee smiling

If i were to see thee
After sorrowful years
How should I greet thee
But with silence and tears

My grieving has lessened but a little each day
From pangs that rend my heart in twain
Remorse and shame shall cling to thee
And may they haunt thee like a feverish dream

Works taken from:
Lord Byron
Elizabeth Barrett Browning
Walt Whitman
Battle Hymn of the Republic
Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Submitted on 2007-11-09 12:12:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I never heard of a text weave poem before. It was pretty cool how you did it. Thanks for sharing this.

| Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]

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