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    dots Submission Name: Dreamsdots
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    Author: Lover girl
    ASL Info:    17, female
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83/54/24
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    Description:
       these are feelings and thoughts that have piled in my head for so long that i had to get them all out. this is a text weave poem so they are not all my words, but the feelings are all the same.


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    dotsDreamsdots
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    My eyes have seen the glory
    But my heart has felt the pain
    Life is but an empty dream
    Where no hope can remain

    Not a day passes
    Nor a night can slip by
    Without bringing me memories
    Of your bright shining eyes

    It was thy love proved false and frail
    It was thy untrue being
    I see thine image through my tears tonight
    And yet today I saw thee smiling

    If i were to see thee
    After sorrowful years
    How should I greet thee
    But with silence and tears

    My grieving has lessened but a little each day
    From pangs that rend my heart in twain
    Remorse and shame shall cling to thee
    And may they haunt thee like a feverish dream

    Works taken from:
    Lord Byron
    Elizabeth Barrett Browning
    Walt Whitman
    Battle Hymn of the Republic
    Henry Wadsworth Longfellow




    Submitted on 2007-11-09 12:12:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I never heard of a text weave poem before. It was pretty cool how you did it. Thanks for sharing this.

    nicely
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]


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