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    dots Submission Name: Rippled Reflectiondots
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    Author: bas
    ASL Info:    24/f/somewhere...
    Elite Ratio:    5.03 - 44/49/35
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsRippled Reflectiondots
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    The eyes they say
    are the windows to the soul
    ----but all that shows are mirrors-
    mirrors bouncing back and forth

    and in this rippled reflection
    there is great sadness
    like that of a mother's agony
    for her lost child

    You show fear
    of what tomorrow may bring perhaps
    or may it be simply
    fear of life?

    It's like the stillness right before the storm
    the calm stagnant anticipation,
    you seem helpless
    you -- who's staring back at me

    You try to be like a pillar that stands tall
    strong against the furious winds of Gaea
    but you’re barely standing –you’re just trying to hold on

    alone

    but be grateful joyful ---- love life ‘till the end
    and show a blissful facade ---- though emptiness remains


    and know
    that your eyes like mirrors they show all things within me
    and in your rippled reflection know that I see me.





    Submitted on 2007-11-09 14:16:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a sad poem, if i understood it right you have lost a child, through death? or maybe the child has been taken from you for some reason or another, there is a big emptiness in this persons heart. lonliness , fear of what tomorrow might bring.there is a brave face on the outside, like you say it can,t fool the mirror, the mirror only sees what it sees and not what we want it to see,i think you have written a very sad poem,and i hope that somehow sunshine may come back into your life.
    respect
    take care
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]


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