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    dots Submission Name: The Kiss Of Darknessdots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 616
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1720



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    dotsThe Kiss Of Darknessdots
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    I was waiting for you
    To open the door
    And let the light in
    I was waiting for your kiss
    To light this endless path
    Which has led me to darkness
    It's led me to despair
    Leading to sadness
    So many things left unsaid

    -Chorus-
    I needed your touch
    To guide these filthy palms
    Through heaven and hell
    Through Earth itself
    But there was one thing
    The last thing to save me,
    And you gave me joy
    In your kiss of darkness

    I waited for your heart
    To bleed my name
    And let me touch it
    I was waiting for your touch
    To guide these sweetened lips
    Which want to taste you
    Wanting to share you
    Wanting to love you
    With many things left unknown

    -Chorus-
    I needed your touch
    To guide these filthy palms
    Through heaven and hell
    Through Earth itself
    But there was one thing
    The last thing to save me,
    And you gave me joy
    In your kiss of darkness

    -Middle 8-
    I need your heart
    I need your lips
    And I need you here
    To give me one last kiss

    -Chorus-
    I needed your touch
    To guide these filthy palms
    Through heaven and hell
    Through Earth itself
    But there was one thing
    The last thing to save me,
    And you gave me joy
    In your kiss of darkness

    I'm feeling the warmth of your arms
    I'm tasting the joy in your lips
    I'm loving the way you hold me
    And I'm in love with only your...
    Kiss of Darkness




    Submitted on 2007-11-09 15:13:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by mustang14 | [ Reply to This ]


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