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    dots Submission Name: What to do?dots
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    Author: sageeriol
    ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314/322/106
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsWhat to do?dots
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    What do you do when your feet fall away
    From under you
    And you drop into
    A nightmare of your own creation?
    What do you do when you scream and scream and
    Still you cannot hear what you want to say?
    What do you do when you are in love
    And it seems you are causing your own demise?
    What do you do when nothing you ever say
    Is the right thing?




    Submitted on 2007-11-09 19:19:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can relate. sometimes it is hard to know what to do. everything is confusing; nothing makes sense. i thought that it was good. short, simple, and to the point. i did think that it kind of cut off a little early. like there was something more that needed to be said. but then again, maybe that was your intention. anyways, i thought that it was pretty good.
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]


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