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    dots Submission Name: Unrealised youdots
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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 492/502/133
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsUnrealised youdots
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    A little girl -
    once that were you and me,
    more of me- maybe;
    dreams of some love and more,
    a lot of oceans back-
    when love stayed-
    now and forever,

    The sun died into oblivion,
    a patient moon would awake,
    hearing prayers,
    feeling teardrops of broken souls,
    A love-brushed soul longs an ever hug,
    selfless bonding go unnoticed,
    when self vows for this story-
    ending forever;

    Would you have cared?
    like before-
    when others didn't influence-
    feelings and your soul,

    Could it be possible?
    you were weak?
    loving me with doubt?

    Could it be true?
    Your love is a pretence?
    breaking me -
    trying foul - to unbreak me?

    Tears soak my night pillow,
    when you stayed -
    wondering awake,
    if I was the one?
    People of your blood wanting us untogether,
    They are of a importance -
    and myself - a twig
    run over and again,
    bearing crushing dreams of others,

    I am exhausted-
    trying and untrying all at once,
    Hoping to fulfill -
    a little girl's dream of love and more.






    Submitted on 2007-11-10 09:26:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i get it. i think that it is about love and the struggles that come with it. it was hard to read though. the words seemed to be just thrown together and random. in some spots it just didn't make sense. i mean, it made sense, but it didn't read very well. you had to stop and pay attention, instead of being able to flow through the whole thing. i think that emotion and the ideas are there, but the wording needs to be reworked a little.
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]



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