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    dots Submission Name: Swansdots
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    Author: Broken-lands
    ASL Info:    13/female/here
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 22/34/32
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 88
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 509



    Description:
       A simple and not so good poem.


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    dotsSwansdots
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    There's no need to cry love,
    there's no need to say no.
    We are both one,
    we are both swans.

    We swim through the night,
    we fly high in the sky.
    We dance with the silence,
    we make our own music.

    We cannot be beautiful always,
    we cannot be ugly either.
    We are what we are,
    we are innocent swans.

    ~




    Submitted on 2007-11-10 11:08:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      simpily extraordinair, that's all i can think of
    | Posted on 2007-11-22 00:00:00 | by Tomo | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that it was pretty good. i liked the metaphors of the swans. i agree that it is simple and simple is good. you say that it is not so good, but it is not so bad either. i mean, it's got good potential. it has decent imagery and it has good wording. i don't know what i would change. i cannot think of anything. the simplicity of it is somwhow soothing.
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]



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