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    dots Submission Name: Nirvana Lost.dots
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    Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
    ASL Info:    20/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.68 - 46/117/100
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    dotsNirvana Lost.dots
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    The throne centered in my drifting thoughts,
    Is readily open to another,
    For you completely lost your dignity,
    Judas,
    When you deceived this very soul.

    The golden crown of memory I donned upon your delicate head,
    Returned to my yearning hands.

    The satin robe of trust that gracefully engulfed your body,
    Torn to shreds right before your treacherous eyes.

    The thoughtful rose that instantly blossomed from a lonely heart,
    Has now struck your own,
    Leaving permanent scars to remind you of what you can no longer attain:
    Freedom from your crime.

    I pity you.
    All because of your own foolish behavior;
    Lost all that could have been treasured the most:
    My precious soul.




    Submitted on 2007-11-10 19:13:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      As zovjraar...

    Finality measured in several pieces, self-esteem retained. Would that all could do as well. Nicely done.
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful words, very powerful emotion.
    first reaction: ouch! wouldn't want to be that guy (or girl, no assumptions or judgments)
    second reaction (when i read it out loud): i love this poem. it's just gorgeous, it flows from the lips so easily.
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by zovjraar | [ Reply to This ]


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