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    dots Submission Name: Release.dots
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    Author: dark_dreams6789
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 6/11/12
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 68
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    Bytes: 851



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    Devour this cold, sinful soul
    I don't deserve your helpful hand.
    I always dig myself in deeper,
    I am almost always dealt the same hand.

    Bleed me dry and stop my breath,
    My seams, it seems, have come apart.
    Oh God, I hate what I've become,
    Freeze my mind, and stop this numb heart.

    How blind am I to not have seen,
    How cold my soul's become.
    The walls I've built around my heart,
    The hole I've dug, has left me numb...

    Give up on me,
    I'll only pull you down with me.
    I don't want to be your falling,
    Please, lose your grip, and set me free,
    My wonderful darling...




    Submitted on 2007-11-10 22:36:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Now this Is an Excellent write that I also found to be incrediblly sad
    I too once found myself in this state where I believed I was poison to anyone who dared try to bring me a little bit of Happiness
    It wasnt until I finally learned a very important lesson
    YOU CANT LOVE ANOTHER UNTIL YOU LEARN HOW TO LOVE YOURSELF
    that life began to begin anew
    All doors that were closed to me for so long finally began to open
    I Hope and Pray you find the Happiness you are looking for
    I will be Praying for you
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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