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    dots Submission Name: Untitled - 11-9-07dots
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    Author: dark_dreams6789
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 6/11/12
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 62
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 338



    Description:
       This is part of a longer poem, but the rest is too personal for the world wide web. But I really like this part. : )

    [Yes, Jason, I did change the fourth line.]


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    dotsUntitled - 11-9-07dots
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    Shaking, Breaking,
    It's my heart you're taking.
    Sighing, Crying,
    Inside I'm dieing. [I can't stop trying..]
    Bleeding, Needing,
    My heart has taken quite the beating.
    Choking, Hoping,
    But Always Knowing...




    Submitted on 2007-11-10 22:46:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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