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    dots Submission Name: My Heartdots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 14
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1005
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    Description:
       This is the shortest poem I have written, these 4 lines describe perfectly what I was feeling at the time.


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    dotsMy Heartdots
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    My heart is shattered
    The pieces scattered
    Betrayal of trust
    Turned it to dust




    Submitted on 2007-11-11 03:53:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I would say that your discription says it all. I'm sure that you speak for a lot of people (not to say that I think your experience means nothing) It doesn't really say much about you, give it a face next time maybe.
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by fate_s nemisis | [ Reply to This ]


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