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    dots Submission Name: Love and Deathdots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsLove and Deathdots
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    Love….
    When you give all of your heart

    Hate…
    Is wishing you were apart

    Win…
    What happens when you return my love

    Lose…
    What happens when you are devoid of

    High…
    How I feel when I’m with you

    Low…
    Because you are being untrue

    Light…
    What I see at the end of the night

    Dark…
    The time to make everything right

    Phony…
    Pretending your feelings are true

    Real…
    What my feelings are for you

    Deny….
    That you’ve ever done any wrong

    Accept…
    That my feelings are very strong

    Sleep….
    Where good dreams and memories haunt

    Awake….
    Where the deception and all the lies taunt

    Life…
    You just want to make it through

    Death…
    Is out there calling to you




    Submitted on 2007-11-11 03:57:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great job summing up your thoughts so simply. I'm so long winded when it comes to what I feel but you opened your mind with a few words. I leaves me wondering what inspired it though.
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by fate_s nemisis | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way you decided to write this, beginning with a word and describing it using what you feel. You keep it very simple, which is good. However, I think that there is more here...more of a story to tell.

    My favorite lines were

    "Sleep….
    Where good dreams and memories haunt

    Awake….
    Where the deception and all the lies taunt"

    There is so much truth there...when one sleeps one dreams, maybe not always of good memories, but of imaginative times of happiness, and when awaken its back to reality, back to what could at times be a [censored] of living.
    Makes me think of all the times Ive been woekn up from an amazing dream, and then wishing I could keep sleeping to retrieve it...
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by nonexistant | [ Reply to This ]


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