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    dots Submission Name: Opposites Detractdots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 840
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    dotsOpposites Detractdots
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    Lies……..
    That is all I ever hear

    Truth……..
    Never even gets near

    Noise……..
    Drowning out all the sorrow

    Silence……..
    What I’m hoping for tomorrow

    Wrong……..
    What I’m told I always am

    Right……..
    Nothing more than a sham

    Give……..
    Till it hurts in every way

    Take……..
    Nothing’s free you have to pay

    Go……..
    I have to get away from here

    Stay……..
    But I really want to be near

    Bad……..
    That’s how I feel most every day

    Good……..
    Is how I’d feel if you would stay

    Hate……..
    That’s all I feel from you

    Love……..
    The only feeling that is new

    Life……..
    Something I am tired of

    Death……..
    Where I must go without your love




    Submitted on 2007-11-11 03:57:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow this says a lot without too many unnecessary words and you really get your point across...i think i like this most of all because i can relate to what you have written throughout and i think most people have been heart broken enough at one time or another to understand how it feels to think you dont want to go on without that special person in your life anymore..keep writing...(stormyskies on behalf of paul/his father)
    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by Pizzolopoetry | [ Reply to This ]
      Dang! That's a heavy ending, Dean! Not that there's anything wrong with that, lol. It just really hit me. As I'm sure it was supposed to.
    I've never seen an example of the one-word lead-in like that, but I like the way you used it. I might as well admit right now I'll be trying to use it. It's very effective, and not so flowery as I tend to get sometimes.
    Thank you. And thank you for the encouragement you give on my writings. It's much appreciated, my friend. amrslamr (anna)
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by amrslamr | [ Reply to This ]


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