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    dots Submission Name: The little old man sitting by the seadots

    Author: Keiran
    ASL Info:    20/M/NZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 40/47/33
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe little old man sitting by the seadots

    The little old man sitting by the sea
    Watched me dig my toes into the sand
    He just smiled and nodded
    As did I
    Because we both know that one day
    Iíll be that little old man

    Heís got eyes green like the sea
    A weather beaten face
    Cracked from too much time in the sun
    And heís got a gaze that sees for miles out onto the deep blue

    To you it would seem that he stares at nothing
    But heís watching intently
    Every move the ocean makes
    An old friend
    But thereís always something new

    His soul is buried beneath the waves
    His heart tacking to a wind he canít feel anymore
    And I canít help but think that heís hoping
    For a wave to come and sweep him away

    Some would say he be a warning to anyone lured by the briny blue
    They would be right
    But I donít think I ever wanted something that could be tamed
    Not for me

    The little old man sitting by the sea
    Watched me watching him watching the waves
    He just smiled again
    As did I
    Because we both know that one day long ago
    He had been like me

    Submitted on 2007-11-11 04:50:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow.....i really felt a connection with this piece and the idea that life moves in circles, and that the old man was waiting patiently for the next adventure. the description of the old man is really good and i liked the fact that you seem to have a fascination with the sea.....who wants something that can be tamed? good point!
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by freeangel | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Jen Flynn
    I thought this was extremely touching
    I too have a Love affair with the Ocean and anything water
    I believe water has a cleansing effect that restores one to the Happiness they had before depression tryed her hardest to intervene
    Again Excellent Job!!!
    I Look forward to reading more from you in the future
    God Bless
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is...touching.
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]

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