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    dots Submission Name: The furthest star....dots

    Author: freeangel
    ASL Info:    22/female/bournemouth
    Elite Ratio:    3.59 - 87/117/110
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 496
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 871

       does what it says on the tin really:)

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    dotsThe furthest star....dots


    Wraps itís cold sticky fingers around the pulsating orb.
    As the light struggles to keep the fragile flames burning.
    It struggles as though trying to keep from drowning in a black quagmire,
    to stay alive, to keep going.

    It hurts, as though the pain will never cease from forming in fresh batches
    Like an ice cold river studded with blackened fallen trees,
    the passage through her system tears and scratches,
    cutting and bleeding.
    Leaving the flesh to rot while still aching with indescribable pain.
    Pain that stretches past the furthest star and plunges
    deeper than a sea of unfathomable depth.
    Leaving her there for an instant, before reluctantly
    pulling her back,
    in real pain
    that will never
    ever end.

    Submitted on 2007-11-11 13:03:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ouch........................ I gotta wonder. Whats
    behind your work? Pain I am Quite fillimer with.
    But there is only a few things that I can think of
    that goes down to the bone, ......................
    like that.

    You maid your point. Perhaps I think you should
    give it a reason. even if there is no conclusion.
    Just to give your work more direction.


    | Posted on 2007-11-13 00:00:00 | by oononotthatguy | [ Reply to This ]

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