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    dots Submission Name: Lets go clubbingdots
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    Author: Thinkingofyou
    ASL Info:    18/f/The sunny state
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 283/423/132
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Happy
    Total Views: 1008
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1136



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    dotsLets go clubbingdots
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    In a city full of tight jeans and long shirts.
    I know the place where I'll fit in.
    With my pale skin and my metal lips.
    I know a city where I can shine.
    Glowing with my neon wrists.
    Hitting under the black light.
    Everything looks better when it's not normal.
    I know this city will let me be.
    With my painted on eyebrows.
    And neon pink lashes.
    I can flirt and it'll be interesting.
    Black nails and orange poka dots.
    I've been to this city, it's everything I know.
    Cut and spiked my hair will be a hit.
    Females are allowed to look this way here.
    Jewels and glamor shots are the only thing I see.
    My eyes cannot focus for this city has become me.
    Lime green fishnets exposing my thighs.
    Walking tall with my black leather boots.
    An inch below my waste hangs my bright blue skirt.
    Taking tokes off the blunt passed my way.
    In this city, where I can be me,
    I know I fit in.
    With my pale white skin, my neon wrists.
    I know I'll be just fine.




    Submitted on 2007-11-11 21:01:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love the use of description.
    I can actually picture it all.
    && it's so great to be so conformable in your own skin.
    It was a great read.
    Thank you =]
    | Posted on 2008-01-27 00:00:00 | by sum12luv | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it!

    The imagery is amazing.

    The words are perfect.

    The longing to belong to this place comes through...as does the fulfillment of finding the place that you believe you do belong in...'

    I shall go give it a listen...but I really like these lyrics...
    | Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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