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    dots Submission Name: Goodbyedots
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    Author: tinker6776
    Elite Ratio:    0.23 - 0/1/2
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsGoodbyedots
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    when you look at him you know
    the tears are about to fall
    he said that little word that cuts you deep
    Goodbye
    Why does it hurt so bad when he tells you he dosnt love you?
    why does it cut so deep?
    Is it because you know you love him?
    Is it because he you know he's leaving?
    It hurts so bad to know he's gone.
    But why?
    Why cant i say goodbye?




    Submitted on 2007-11-11 21:26:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It needs some work. Similes! Literary lingo, etc.
    Make it your own. Stop asking questions.
    Express, say don't tell. And last of all sweetheart, stop and stitch it. I believe that you can make this into a beautiful poem.
    | Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by Zaftigical | [ Reply to This ]


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