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    dots Submission Name: "Deathnote..."dots

    Author: Drifting Star
    ASL Info:    19/F/Somewhere
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 22/101/73
    Words: 440
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 883
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       Okay, this is based off the mangas. AND NO, I know it doesn't follow the canon plot-line and that it's basically a horrible drabble, however...

    I don't care. I wrote it for me. Just because. On the spur of the moment. Don't review and tell me how I should fix this line or that one. Just tell me what you thought about the overall picture.

    And for those of you who don't know DeathNote, don't worry. Just read it anyway.

    Far From Elite,


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Hair flips over into his eyes
    as he leans over his desk, determined;
    the notebook is open across the surface--
    so seemingly innocent and nondescript.

    Quill in hand, he pauses to think
    the best way to be rid of a sinner;
    a flicker of thought and a wry smile
    and he charges on, penning the scene.

    Ten seconds and then six minutes--
    and then fourty seconds again;
    When he finally sets the pen aside
    he is content with this masterpiece.

    He has written an end for himself
    just in case no one has the nerve to do so--
    guilty and tired he can go to his grave,
    never outdone, merely self-retired.

    Guilty; he turns the word over and over
    eyes shadowed so unusually overcome him--
    memories wash over and inside, sweeping;
    he breathes a ragged sigh of desperation.

    The end comes to him just in time--days later;
    His enemies dead all around and he, alone.
    It is over, done--finished, complete.
    He raises his eyes to the sky and coughs.

    Across the street is a cathedral--
    the bell tolls twice for him;
    he approaches on steady legs--
    enters and seats himself within.

    And there, above in the place of honor--
    the figure of a god he never believed in--
    of a archetype of false justice--
    and the biggest pain in his ass.

    No matter; he coughed again, breath short;
    no matter, breathe, breathe--sigh.
    Eyes went out of focus and his head swam--
    For a moment, there was nothing.

    And then everything was nothing;
    shadows consumed him and he was gone--
    and then he was there in the place
    that was nowhere at all.

    Not Heaven, not Hell.
    Just--not anywhere at all;
    undone, erased...
    ceasing to exist in any form.

    Before stood a thing--
    a thing in a form that was like him;
    human-looking and crouched down
    his hand paused above the chess board.

    The figure looked up and blinked--once;
    he lifted the black knight wiht two fingers
    and moved it off the board, to the side;
    "I've been waiting for you."

    The other smiled because it was true--
    waiting and waiting, seperate and alone;
    he takes his seat across from the other
    And says, "Shut up, Ryuzaki."

    A cocked eyebrow, an exaggerated sigh,
    "Your move, Kira."
    The newly-dead smiles and shrugs,
    "Isn't it always, L?"

    A shared smile between them and a move;
    the game is begun again;
    "You know this could go on forever don't ya?"
    ...not that he cares of course.
    The other smiles knowingly...
    "I plan on it."


    Submitted on 2007-11-11 23:43:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Thanks to you and Ivory, I kept picturing Ferdie playing chess and making smart rebuttals. A fairly amusing picture.
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by Nearby Thoughts | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a good read. i love manga and have seen some eps of deathnote. i think u have captured Light's personality in this piece which i must applaued. u also have captured that cocky sadistic tone in the way u have written this peice which reflects deathnote and especially Light.
    a good read.
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by sushi wok | [ Reply to This ]

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