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    dots Submission Name: Calling out your name. (Nov. 11 2007)dots

    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 279
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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       The emptiness of lost faith.

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    dotsCalling out your name. (Nov. 11 2007)dots

    You ask me for the words,
    Given by the sword the punishment for some,
    You ask me for my love and faith,
    Devoted servant nothing needed but your presence
    And their I lay beneath you unguarded truly yours.
    There I stood beside you,
    Given up what eyes needed to believe,
    There I stood yours,
    Truly yours,
    There I stood devoted and blood stained,
    There I allowed you to lead the way, but asked,
    Only asked for my protection,
    Begged with my soul that night and you turned away.
    I stayed with you battered and beaten still in devotion,
    There I laid beneath you,
    There I stood beside you,
    Ready for whatever game you wished to play,
    And all I asked was that you’d stay,
    All I desired was for your hand throughout the rain.
    Memories came crashing down beseeching me from that fogged crowd,
    And you vanished,
    Devotion shattered with bitter anger,
    And you vanished,
    Left the empty shell beneath begging on her knees,
    There you left uncovered and broken with the memories of that night,
    There you left me calling, left me begging, left me on my knees.
    And here I sit, the empty tears,
    You walked from my side and I am calling out,
    Wanting nothing more then you,
    Nothing more but you,
    Nothing more but your re-entry into my life,
    Nothing more but the feeling of your watchful gaze,
    Nothing more but my faith to return.
    I sit here lost without that which was,
    Forever chanting in my blood,
    The faith of a thousand slain beast ,
    But not alone I sit in the wake without peace.
    Empty and wasted calling out your name.

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      This is beautiful.

    I'm not sure if it is relationship based or God based. Regardless, It is beautiful.

    The imagery is lovely and the words are all tied together in such a way that they should never be taken apart.

    | Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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