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Author: Dying Young
ASL Info:    18 / F / Lebanon
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No matter how you used to love someone.. when they hurt you, you just can't forbid yourself from hurting them back !!... And that's because you really loved them ....


Left behind your viciousness, I’m holding my tongue
Victim of your heartlessness, sober for so long
Chasing shadows of evaporating recalls
Hanging on the most deceiving walls

My hero of man had the right to be mistaken
After all you were just another human
Maybe I should have analyzed your reflections
Maybe I shouldn’t have build so many expectations

Sometimes it seems the world is crumbling over my head
Each time I remember the note that I’ve read
The note you were coward to declare
The note that torn my pieces into fragments

But don’t be duped by this angelic face
Don’t forget the revenge lust of the human race
You won’t get away with your crimes
Leaving me crying my rhymes

Submitted on 2007-11-12 05:15:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was really intense, it said a lot to me. the line "Don't forget the revenge lust of the human race", this line really captured my heart, i have never heard someone describe vengance like this before, thw word revenge is a little over sayd, but i lked it any way ^_^
| Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]

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