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Forbidden Love

Author: Dying Young
ASL Info:    18 / F / Lebanon
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Words: 106
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Forbidden Love

Mysterious are the glances in your eyes
So deep, so sweet in their oddness
Miserable are the groan you breed
Coming from the coldness in your residence

Meticulous in a seducing manner
Clamoring for an impossible love
Bleeding from a none mending howler
A black blotch descending from above

You were always the one they needed
To carry out certain chores
But never the one to their daughter
You just couldn't suit their norms

And so you had to fall down
With the strength of a desperate shove
And so you had to go down
With the vestige of a forbidden love

Submitted on 2007-11-12 05:19:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  they are the worst type... the love other wont allow you to have. well written, and stayed true to topic throughout. if this is a true store, then i'm sorry. if not, i'm still sorry.

great write, thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2008-08-14 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]

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