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Alone In My Head


Author: Dying Young
ASL Info:    18 / F / Lebanon
Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 78 /34 /27
Words: 248
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Alone In My Head



I’m alone in my head
I can’t hear their deafening voices around
I’m alone in my head
Because I’m sick of the hum they bring out
I’m alone in my head
I can hear the echo of my inner clamors
I’m alone in my head
Because I can’t change enough to suit their standards
I’m alone in my head
Because my best is never enough
I’m alone in my head
Because I’m fed up with giving so much
I’m alone in my head
Because they refuse to pay me back
I’m alone in my head
And I’m no longer fading to black
I’m alone in my head
And I’ve buried the undesired in a grave
I’m alone n my head
Because I don’t want to be on the same wave
… with them
I’m alone in my head
That their judgments don’t matter now on
I’m alone in my head
Because I’m tired of failing at carrying on
I’m alone in my head
That I’m the boss of my own
I’m alone in my head
Because I’m tired of being unknown
I’m alone in my head
And I’m anonymous in my own way
I’m alone in my head
Because I’m weary of what they say
I’m alone in my head
Because for the first time I’m alive
Yes … I’m alone in my head
I’m alive in my head
I’m alone in my head
And I’m free
I’m alone in my head
And I’m simply ME !




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  You have some good stuff in this piece.
There are a few parts where the rhyme is forced. I like the message at the end, I just wonder if you could've ended stronger.
Stay positive, keeping being you :)

nicely
| Posted on 2007-11-16 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]


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