Love Vengeance

Author: Dying Young ASL Info:    18 / F / Lebanon Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 78 /34 /27 Words: 58

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Love Vengeance

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Wounded by memories, i'm trying to live Tryin to forget, trying to forgive But how to forgive, how not to retaliate From those who stole my joy, who stole my fate Who ripped my heart and threw it on a plate Covered with blood, served with hate Breathing its last words : " You're still my soulmate! "

Submitted on 2007-11-12 10:01:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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wow i love the continuos rhymeing at the end retailate, plate, hate, soulmate i love that, and i could literally feel the viousness in your poem, the short clipped lines do good to add to the intensity of your poem.

| Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]

I love to rhyme, and I love reading rhyme, but I think you have too much in this piece. I think it takes away from the serious nature of this piece. I can feel the passion of this piece. I think it has a lot of heart. nicely

| Posted on 2007-11-16 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]

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