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    dots Submission Name: Look At The Differencedots

    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1058
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsLook At The Differencedots

    saw you the other day
    the past came rushing through my mind
    everything i once felt for you
    a love that once was blind

    but look at the difference
    how both of our lives have changed
    mine for the better
    but you are still the same

    my friend spoke the truth
    so blunt and painful
    she told u just how bad you were
    and how much she doesnt approve

    i have a new bf now
    you got to meet him that day
    did u see the smile on my face
    how happy i was that day

    im glad that you broke up with me
    my life has been much better
    never have i smiled so much
    im glad were not together

    he is my world more then you ever were
    my one my only my everything
    everything you were never

    Submitted on 2007-11-12 22:01:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Cool it had great emotion and flow,
    I loved this poem it is a gret moving on poem, right on.
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this write, thought it had a nice flow but was also expressive.I could relate 2 it.Good job. L.
    | Posted on 2007-11-13 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Toker | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good and so much feeling at your age. M.
    | Posted on 2007-11-13 00:00:00 | by mekisha4ever | [ Reply to This ]

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