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    dots Submission Name: Ehhhhdots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 638
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1181



    Description:
       This may or may not make sense to any of you and it really isn't that good I wrote it when I was in one of my many moods. It's more like a ramble then anything. Ehh I don't know..


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    dotsEhhhhdots
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    The way I'm wathcing.. Life just flies by just waiting for someone to try and stop it. But they meet in failure, they to realize... exsistance.. Is it pointless.. They hold the blade so close... Waiting... just waiting.. for it to fade away into the nothingness....

    I don't know how to tell you this.
    I'm postive you won't care.
    I don't understand the way I think,
    or who I really am.
    I hide from those that care,
    put up barriers to keep them away.
    I don't want them to worry,
    I wish they wouldn't care.
    The ones I don't want to hurt,
    I end up hurting everyday.
    I love you, it's a sensation,
    I never used to know.
    But you let me see it,
    It's bee so hard since letting you go.
    Hurting you?
    It was never what I wanted.
    I hate the way the thinking goes,
    hidden reasons as to why.
    Deep down in my soul I feel you watching.
    You watch me as you plot,
    the most bitter end of me.
    Parting... It was sad.
    You instead became mad,
    Leaving me to associate love as bad.




    Submitted on 2007-11-13 11:32:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      sweet ramble. it makes sence to me cuz u wrote what u feel at this time.

    i digg the end.


    peace

    Grim Aylin
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is not bad at all
    This is a True Honest expression of the Love you feel for another
    It is so hard when the One we Love breaks free from us
    I urge you to turn to the good memories and the Lessons learned from this relationship to carry your Heart to the next one
    There were a couple of times in this write you resorted to rhyming
    To me it seems like that destroyed the flow of the poem a little
    You might want to consider changing that but I stress that is tottally up to you
    I would never tell someone how to write
    I Pray you find the Happiness you are looking for
    You deserve it
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-11-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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