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    dots Submission Name: Unfuckintitleddots
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    Author: Cricket
    ASL Info:    19/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 81/51/27
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 593
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 543



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    dotsUnfuckintitleddots
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    You stand there within my head mocking me

    Afraid of what we are meant to be

    You tell me can you feel my soul slipping away

    Fuck you this my punishment its how I pay

    As I have said I do not regret that day

    Mistakes make me and my hateful ways

    Trapped in my mind loving this hell

    Donít plan on changing where I dwell

    Will you free me of this twisted reality

    Afraid to make me yours so we will never see




    Submitted on 2007-11-13 12:30:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think this was really powerful and well written, full of emotion. I really liked it.
    | Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by biffy2006 | [ Reply to This ]
      i think this is a powerful statement by someone who sounds thorouly pissed off
    its all good to me and the title speaks volumes

    sandman
    | Posted on 2007-11-13 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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