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    dots Submission Name: beat you bluedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Lyrics/You left me
    Total Views: 838
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 243



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       something ive had in my head for him for a while. hope you like love


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    dotsbeat you bluedots
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    after everything you put me through
    i still stayed true to you
    and then i put you through
    the same times two
    and now you say we're through
    i even played by all your rules
    i think i beat you blue




    Submitted on 2007-11-13 12:47:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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