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    dots Submission Name: Scarlet Letter Guiltdots

    Author: ollie_wicked
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 320/199/89
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsScarlet Letter Guiltdots

    I never meant for these locks and cages
    or setting stages of scaffold scenes
    and pirating dreams

    You're swimming in my dreams
    falling at my seams with misery
    and love blasphemy

    Even when i look for you i quiver
    a shake and a shiver consumes me
    of what can never be

    If all i am is what we did in naivety
    I'll become unworthy of living
    and ever loving

    Submitted on 2007-11-13 23:39:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      inspiration? i thought this was pretty good. a bit vague on the overall, not really pulling a lot of detail one way or the other. not vague enough to be totally ambiguous, not specific enough to get a real image. but i liked it anyway.
    | Posted on 2007-11-14 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

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